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  • Ebonslayer
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    February 11, 2016
    Like I said he's a 'unique' form of vampire. If you look at my screenshot on the TOC you can get a pretty basic picture of what he looks like. Look closely and you can see that he keeps his black and red skin despite being a vampire so he can keep concealed very easily.

    Besides that he is a master illusionist and his 'master' was a trained sneak as well, better than most assassins, and being born under the sign of the Shadow Ebonslayer is a born assassin.

    Oh, and it's the 11th of Second Seed. In case you didn't know the sack of the Imperial city was on the 12th of Second Seed
  • Ebonslayer
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    February 11, 2016
    I looked through your edit, Lissette and liked what you did with it. The changes are quite subtle but nicely done. Much appreciated.
  • The Long-Chapper
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    February 11, 2016

    You're welcome, Ebon. I tend to just focus on mechanics when I work on edits here and you did benefit from Sisterbane's watchful eye as well. If you find typos... we apologize in advance. Yeah, I had forgotten the date. I have a few people in Straag Rod who are running around on that day, including Skjor. 

  • Ebonslayer
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    February 12, 2016
    What's a Sisterbane?
  • Sotek
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    February 12, 2016

    Sisterbane is an awesome sister of Lissette's who can hunt down errors faster than Red and Omega hunting deer on the plains. And believe me, that's fast....

    Hoping one day she'll join blog.

  • Ben W
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    February 29, 2016

    At long last my Chapter 8 is finished. It only took me 3 weeks to do so and Sotek knows this XP

    At any rate, I know there are errors in it that I just cannot see as of right now. Any feedback, complaints, concerns are welcomed as I take all into consideration. Thank you in advance for taking the time to read it. 

  • The Long-Chapper
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    February 29, 2016
    Hey, does Xian not know Yol Toor Shul? Albee flambeed Nimhe's ass. Lol, BBQ spider. Bitch went down. Just wondering if he knew other shouts.
  • Ben W
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    February 29, 2016

    If you remember the first Chapter, he does know it. He knows others but loves to use Whirlwind Sprint as you well know (breaking bones and whatnot with it :P). And yes, Nimhe is a bitch isn't she? Thank you for agreeing that Nimhe is one Lissette; suppose I can compile a list of the shouts the ebony scaled lizard knows.... I'm very reasonable I assure you :)

  • The Long-Chapper
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    February 29, 2016
    I'm just saying why not use Yol? It's proven in game to be great with spiders. It's just that you've setup Xian to be this species expert and yet he doesn't use fire against a creature that goes down with fire. It's like using an nice enchantment on a frost troll. We don't need the list of shouts. I just don't see the point of Wuld and Fus when you can easily take advantage of the tunnel and Yol the spider dead. It's far more tactical and far less risky.
  • Ben W
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    February 29, 2016

    Thanks that didn't feel like a slap in the face :P

    But let us say he did use Yul at the end instead of what he used, he still has to deal with those fangs biting into his flesh and injecting poison into his system. I could say he wants it to be a challenge but that's a pathetic cop out. But thankfully it's not ready to published on the site.

    I agree Yul would be very tactical and have less risk to the both of them. However I'm not opposed to the idea entirely... I just wanted this one to be suspenseful; and what you say rings true


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