Solid debut here. As Ben said, it feels pretty short, and there are a few inconsistencies. In addition to the Enchanting thing Ben mentioned, I was thrown off by this paragraph:
As many of our special moves come from chaining shouts together we do need unlimited shouts. To do this use the Fortify Restoration glitch to make a potion of Fortify Restoration with a magnitude of 100%.
First off, you didn't actual report using any combinations of Shouts -- not in the special moves section, nor in the gameplay section. I'm confused about whether you actually used this mechanic, and if so, how it fits into the build.
Furthermore, simply drinking a 100% Restoration potion before equipping the Amulet of Talos would only net you 40% Fortify Shouts, not 100%. You need +150% on the potion to get your amulet to 50% Fortify Shouts, and even then, you need to throw in the Blessing of Talos as well for the remaining 50%. I'm not sure whether your build is capable of making a +150% potion with its current perks.... Maybe if you use Seeker of Shadows when you craft the potion; I think you'd still be a tiny bit short of 150% though, even then.
I kind of get the impression that the unlimited shouting aspect was something you were going to experiment with, but ended up dropping, and forgot to cut from the writeup. Apologies if this isn't the case, but right now, it's not integrated effectively into the writeup.
Other than that, there's definitely some good here, and some potential for more. Presentation is solid, especially for a debut. Gameplay seems interesting enough, good balance with the moves and the potions. I'd just try to expand a bit on the gameplay and roleplay, look out for a couple of minor typos, and address the things Ben and I mentioned. With a bit of polish, you could take this a few steps beyond its current state and have a very nice debut build on your hands.
Solid debut here. As Ben said, it feels pretty short, and there are a few inconsistencies. In addition to the Enchanting thing Ben mentioned, I was thrown off by this paragraph:
As many of our special moves come from chaining shouts together we do need unlimited shouts. To do this use the Fortify Restoration glitch to make a potion of Fortify Restoration with a magnitude of 100%.
First off, you didn't actual report using any combinations of Shouts -- not in the special moves section, nor in the gameplay section. I'm confused about whether you actually used this mechanic, and if so, how it fits into the build.
Furthermore, simply drinking a 100% Restoration potion before equipping the Amulet of Talos would only net you 40% Fortify Shouts, not 100%. You need +150% on the potion to get your amulet to 50% Fortify Shouts, and even then, you need to throw in the Blessing of Talos as well for the remaining 50%. I'm not sure whether your build is capable of making a +150% potion with its current perks.... Maybe if you use Seeker of Shadows when you craft the potion; I think you'd still be a tiny bit short of 150% though, even then.
I kind of get the impression that the unlimited shouting aspect was something you were going to experiment with, but ended up dropping, and forgot to cut from the writeup. Apologies if this isn't the case, but right now, it's not integrated effectively into the writeup.
Other than that, there's definitely some good here, and some potential for more. Presentation is solid, especially for a debut. Gameplay seems interesting enough, good balance with the moves and the potions. I'd just try to expand a bit on the gameplay and roleplay, look out for a couple of minor typos, and address the things Ben and I mentioned. With a bit of polish, you could take this a few steps beyond its current state and have a very nice debut build on your hands.
