It's an entertaining build, and I'm giving it my +1 on that basis, but I honestly almost didn't read it, because the errors in the opening are so distracting. You really need to clean up the grammar. "Vigil" (refers to the organization), "Vigilant" (refers to the members), and "Vigilante" (refers to something else entirely) are not interchangeable, but you use them interchangeably. You mix past and present tense, sometimes in the same sentences. Four sentences are missing punctuation. You have a subject / verb agreement issue ("he stroke"). It's obvious you put a lot of love and thought into this build, but the presentation of the teaser comes across as sloppy.
It's an entertaining build, and I'm giving it my +1 on that basis, but I honestly almost didn't read it, because the errors in the opening are so distracting. You really need to clean up the grammar. "Vigil" (refers to the organization), "Vigilant" (refers to the members), and "Vigilante" (refers to something else entirely) are not interchangeable, but you use them interchangeably. You mix past and present tense, sometimes in the same sentences. Four sentences are missing punctuation. You have a subject / verb agreement issue ("he stroke"). It's obvious you put a lot of love and thought into this build, but the presentation of the teaser comes across as sloppy.
Thanks for the +1 despite the mistakes. I didn't know about the "Vigil" and "Vigilant" difference, and put "Vigilantes" because whenever I left out the e, it said I made a spelling error. I tried to fix everything else you mentioned, but I more than likely left something out. Sorry about the mistakes, I'm not purposely sloppy, just an idiot.
Thanks for the +1 despite the mistakes. I didn't know about the "Vigil" and "Vigilant" difference, and put "Vigilantes" because whenever I left out the e, it said I made a spelling error. I tried to fix everything else you mentioned, but I more than likely left something out. Sorry about the mistakes, I'm not purposely sloppy, just an idiot.
It's alright, I just think your build would get more attention if it looked a little tighter. It's a really cool idea. I'll probably try it eventually, although I just finished a Daedric melee build so I'm moving on to another play style for now.
Spell check is the most insidious invention in the history of humanity, if you ask me. It's brainwashed us all into thinking it's authoritative. It makes people worse writers, not better.
It's alright, I just think your build would get more attention if it looked a little tighter. It's a really cool idea. I'll probably try it eventually, although I just finished a Daedric melee build so I'm moving on to another play style for now.
Spell check is the most insidious invention in the history of humanity, if you ask me. It's brainwashed us all into thinking it's authoritative. It makes people worse writers, not better.
I absolutely love your outcast's introduction narrative! It was a very entertaining read!
The aesthetics and dynamics of the build feel so natural; so complete! Whether or not it is a unique build, there's no denying that the character has depth.
He's like the Jack Bauer of the Vigilants of Stendarr; the only one who is willing to do what is necessary to get results. Despite using Daedric Artifacts, he looks pure as a hero. But he is still conflicted by his compromises. Without strong virtue, he risks being twisted and corrupted by the powers that he had claimed.
This deserves way more likes!
+1
I absolutely love your outcast's introduction narrative! It was a very entertaining read!
The aesthetics and dynamics of the build feel so natural; so complete! Whether or not it is a unique build, there's no denying that the character has depth.
He's like the Jack Bauer of the Vigilants of Stendarr; the only one who is willing to do what is necessary to get results. Despite using Daedric Artifacts, he looks pure as a hero. But he is still conflicted by his compromises. Without strong virtue, he risks being twisted and corrupted by the powers that he had claimed.
This deserves way more likes!
+1
Nice little twist on the Vigilant concept. I love the inclusion of Dawnbreaker and Spellbreaker, and the armor combo looks pretty good too. Great work on this one.
Nice little twist on the Vigilant concept. I love the inclusion of Dawnbreaker and Spellbreaker, and the armor combo looks pretty good too. Great work on this one.