Thank you very much :) I just need to work on my presentation, evidently lol. The perk and equipment spreads read fine on Powerpoint...XD it shouldn't be hard to fix them, I just need to go picture hunting.
Oh, and a quick aesthetic tip; I didn't put this in here, due a role playing aspect, but if you become a vampire and wear the ebony mail, you basically look like a fiend of shadows straight from the ninth ring of hell, or Boethiah's literal conduit. Your eyes glow through the shadow cloak if you don't have head gear on. It looks sick as balls.
However, I didn't want to add allegiance to Molag Ball by becoming a vampire. The Agent already is deep within the web of Mephala, and owes his immortal soul to Nocturnal; luckily, Mephala is an ally of sorts of Boethiah, and in my opinion, the weaker of the two, and Nocturnal will never get his damned soul, because he will live forever.
Thank you very much :) I just need to work on my presentation, evidently lol. The perk and equipment spreads read fine on Powerpoint...XD it shouldn't be hard to fix them, I just need to go picture hunting.
Oh, and a quick aesthetic tip; I didn't put this in here, due a role playing aspect, but if you become a vampire and wear the ebony mail, you basically look like a fiend of shadows straight from the ninth ring of hell, or Boethiah's literal conduit. Your eyes glow through the shadow cloak if you don't have head gear on. It looks sick as balls.
However, I didn't want to add allegiance to Molag Ball by becoming a vampire. The Agent already is deep within the web of Mephala, and owes his immortal soul to Nocturnal; luckily, Mephala is an ally of sorts of Boethiah, and in my opinion, the weaker of the two, and Nocturnal will never get his damned soul, because he will live forever.
I think folks have covered the functionality of the build pretty well, so I'll mention a couple of other things I noticed. In the introduction, I see what you're going for with the word "figment", but I don't think it has a connotation with that meaning.
As a matter of strictly personal preference, I'd recommend aligning the gameplay section normally, to the left. Centered text is best for quotes or short segments.
I don't know if this came up before, but I'd also suggest using the completed build perk spread here, with a link to the halfway perk spread.
Great work on your first build!
I think folks have covered the functionality of the build pretty well, so I'll mention a couple of other things I noticed. In the introduction, I see what you're going for with the word "figment", but I don't think it has a connotation with that meaning.
As a matter of strictly personal preference, I'd recommend aligning the gameplay section normally, to the left. Centered text is best for quotes or short segments.
I don't know if this came up before, but I'd also suggest using the completed build perk spread here, with a link to the halfway perk spread.
Great work on your first build!
I fully intended for that stray 'figment' to be fraction. I don't know how it came to be figment; I was working pretty late into the night, I suppose. I agree with the left alignment; I moved everything but the quotes and a few shorter sections over, and it looks cleaner. .
I fully intended for that stray 'figment' to be fraction. I don't know how it came to be figment; I was working pretty late into the night, I suppose. I agree with the left alignment; I moved everything but the quotes and a few shorter sections over, and it looks cleaner. .
I took into account much of the advice I was given within the first day, which I'd like to thank you all for. I did not expect to get that much attention so quickly. Thank you very much! I changed the pictures on the perk and equipment spreads, and though they aren't professional at all, I think they are much easier to read, now. I found some more pictures, realigned a few things, removed a few badly placed words, and here we go! I'll be adding a role play section soon, with some guidelines and strict rules.
I took into account much of the advice I was given within the first day, which I'd like to thank you all for. I did not expect to get that much attention so quickly. Thank you very much! I changed the pictures on the perk and equipment spreads, and though they aren't professional at all, I think they are much easier to read, now. I found some more pictures, realigned a few things, removed a few badly placed words, and here we go! I'll be adding a role play section soon, with some guidelines and strict rules.
I had something similar to this in progress but never went through with it. I think this is more original than what I could have done, your use of Frenzy makes it more viable and I like the outfit. Good job
I had something similar to this in progress but never went through with it. I think this is more original than what I could have done, your use of Frenzy makes it more viable and I like the outfit. Good job