Like everyone said, awesome story, but it needs more. For instance, explain why you didn't add in Resto. If you notice a good amount of the Dawnguard use restoration, and the new spells for the dawn guard are all restoration spells, made to kill vampires. To save some perks also, it's a good idea to only grab block (1/5) since it doesn't stack like other perks. Also, why wouldn't you use an armored troll as a pet follower? Is it role-play, unneeded, etc.? Just some things to think about also!
Like everyone said, awesome story, but it needs more. For instance, explain why you didn't add in Resto. If you notice a good amount of the Dawnguard use restoration, and the new spells for the dawn guard are all restoration spells, made to kill vampires. To save some perks also, it's a good idea to only grab block (1/5) since it doesn't stack like other perks. Also, why wouldn't you use an armored troll as a pet follower? Is it role-play, unneeded, etc.? Just some things to think about also!