Darg Orok the Orc entry 2- Whiterun

  • My father warned me not to go into dark and dangerous places and I always said to him "what do you know dad you're a farmer. Standing before me like a part of the mountain e's Bleak Falls Barrow, it was huge the bandits outside were no match for me as I made my two maces crush all of their heads. I stepped inside the barrow the great door moved slowly an heavily as a light emitted from inside. The door shut itself with a loud bang too which emitted to figures to emerge from the light, it was just more bandits and a campfire and they ran towards me (the bandits not the campfire) and I grabbed their heads and whacked them together then when they were down I decide to smack eaco of heir faces with my maces and they died . I decided to rest at the campfire for a while since I hadn't slept since leaving Riverwood. I awoke a few hours later feeling better, and I proceed further into the barrow I next came to a room with three stone pillars to my left and three symbols above a gate I naturally being an intelligent Orc worked out that when I turned the three rotating pillars the gate would open and so I matched the three pillars to the symbols above the door and to the right of the pillars was a lever and what else are levers for except pulling and I pulled, the gate opened and I still have further to go. I continued through the barrow going here there and down some stairs, I heard someone's voice I proceeded to where it was coming from and cut down some huge cobwebs and to be fair cobwebs build easily but there's someone alive in there and I feared the worse because that person would also have had to cut through the webs but I ran in there he was, a dark elf stuck in cobwebs and as I started cutting through the webs something PULLED me from behind and threw me across the room I looked up at my attacker and there was the biggest spider I had ever seen. I got up drew my two maces and charged I dodged its first bite and struck a blow onto its fangs it staggered then it lunge at me and its blow contacted with my left arm, I stood up again and as it scuttled towards me I jumped... and I landed on its back, it was confused. I had him I pounded his face with m two steel maces going fast as if they were part of my hands until I hit its eyes, the eyes popped and blood hushed out and the spider slumped to the floor I stepped off casually. The dark elf reminding me he was here said "that was AMAZING I went back to him and continued getting the cobwebs off him, when I finished he said "my name is Arvel by the way, Arvel the Swift. "Darg Orok" I replied "come on we're only half way through" We continued through the barrow collecting potions and gold along the way when we finally made I to a door it had a circle in the middle of it with three holes in, it looked like a keyhole. "I know how to open this" Arvel announced. I watched him as he moved three rings each with different animals on them and he rotated them twice each and pulled out a claw made out of gold an put it in into the keyholes, it fitted perfectly. "I got this claw from Riverwood and cane back here because me and my friends had gotten this far before we just neede to get the claw, and now we have it" Arvel stated. The door opened and we continued. It was breathtaking a fantastic view, we had gotten to what seemed the main room. It wasn't built with walls unlike the rest of the barrow and when we looked up we could see the moon it was lovely, but what was really interesting was a huge stone wall in the middle of the room, it had strange markings on it. We ran up to the wall to inspect it closer there were many different symbols. Suddenly a blue aura started enveloping me "What's happening" Arvel said with a worried voice. It was like I absorbed the aura. " I don't feel any different" I said quietly "I suppose nothing happened"Arvel said. Suddenly there was a loud bang behind us and a door of a coffin was flung off from the inside. A creature started getting out it had armor but it looked like a zombie, It roared at us, we looked at each other an shouted "CHHAAARRRRGGGGEEEE" We both dashed forward and lunged at the creature it opened iota mouth and made some kind of sound that pushed me back, it actually pushed me back. My right hand mace flew out my arm. Then the creature it.... it stabbed Arvel, he fell to the floor. I retrieved my mace and turned around the creature was face to face with me and I bring down the fury of my maces and struck it on the head, it somehow exploded. I rushed over to Arvel. "Take the claw and the stone the Draugr was holding and go, go to Whiterun" Arvel had spluttered his last words out. I vowed, I vowed to kill every Draugr in Skyrim for Arvel. I followed a long corridor behind the wall outside and continued my voyage to Whiterun.......

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  • TheMountainsRage
    TheMountainsRage   ·  March 27, 2014
    Thank you. I am new to this and I would like to encourage everyone's support. I will edit my post later, but I need everyone to remember that this is a diary written by an Orc, not one of Adonato's stories so I'm trying to make it as if the Orc wrote it. ...  more
  • Okan-Zeeus
    Okan-Zeeus   ·  March 26, 2014
    This needs a lot of work. I take it you're new to this?
    Your story telling is all over the place - no sense of pacing, poor sentence structure, nonsensical plot, grammar issues... The list goes on and on. You're trying to do so many things here, yet...  more