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Conan the Cimmerian 2:A task from a God

  • Posted by Mattimao1239 July 15, 2012 - 237 views

    I left the little village of Riverwood after hearing that there was a city nearby. I made my way to the local tavern and had a few cups too many of mead and got into a little brawl with a local. Luck for me it was under a bet, I managed to win and got some good info on some rumors going around about a "God" wanting help.

    I took the local carriage to the town of Winterhold and made my way towards the shrine. On the path I was attacked by a bear and as it struck I felt my bones loosen up. After ramming my sword through its mouth I patched myself up and continued.

    I found myself in front of the shrine in less time then estimated and talked to the priestess in front. 

    I found out that the "God" had lost an item that had the potential to possess a soul. This was evil magic, powerful magic...and I wanted it. 

    The priest told me where I could get the item, which still had the soul of the last evil wizard in it.

    After some time I found the item in the depths of a fort west of where my journey started.

     

     

    This "God" then spoke to me myself, she wanted me to go in and destroy the soul of the demon wizard who lives in the item.

    I found myself in the middle of some mystical looking land but I couldn't take it in for very long because as soon as I was there demons attacked me. I dealt with them quickly and patched up my wounds and continued looking for this wizard.

    After some time I came upon a mound that resembled an altar, in front of it stood a man. He turned towards me and yelled at me, the next thing I knew my body was enveloped in ice and fire, the wizard didn't last long, I managed to cut his head off and the world I was in slipped away.

    I awoke in front of the shrine, the mystical item in my hand and now I owned it. 

    I left the altar satisfied and the priestess thanked me for helping her "God". I made my way down the stairs and made camp for the night.

    More power to me on my way towards glory and riches. This new world doesn't stand a chance against Conan the Cimmerian.

Comments

5 Comments
  • Mattimao1239
    Mattimao1239   ·  July 16, 2012
    I love all of the help guys :)
  • Eviltrain
    Eviltrain   ·  July 16, 2012
    TLDR: a character's voice and perspective is often the most interesting thing about them. Don't rely on just "Conan went here and he killed that." That's just a list of errands your wife gave you to accomplish on a Saturday morning.
  • Eviltrain
    Eviltrain   ·  July 16, 2012
    I'll just refer to my brain splurge that I plastered all below your first post. What will make your story interesting won't be you writing about Conan doing this and then doing that. It will be about Conan. Developing Conan, talking about conan, letting u...  more
  • Arike The Redguard
    Arike The Redguard   ·  July 15, 2012
    try to describe the battles more and use more detail instead of saying "the wizard didn't last long, I managed to cut off his head". Otherwise good job just grammar and detail issues
  • Todd
    Todd   ·  July 15, 2012
    Check for spelling any grammar errors, I noticed quite a few. Much better then the last one though. Use more pictures!