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Character Build: Karogran

• Raid

  

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  January 6, 2014

  "Character Build Witch" isn't a tag. The other two are fine I think.

  "Character Build Witch" isn't a tag. The other two are fine I think.
• Dabbareaxe

  

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  January 6, 2014

  A nice concept and a great first build. The only critique I would have is it's perhaps too flowery in places. Expand on what you need to until you've given us enough to play the build exactly how you intended, and then stop. There's no need for everything to have its own paragraph. For example, much of the battle tactics are fairly obvious and unnecessary. I appreciate that you're giving suggestions but it looks like clutter added on. A nice build nonetheless and a well deserved +1. The clear amount of effort you've put in warrants that much, if nothing else.

  A nice concept and a great first build. The only critique I would have is it's perhaps too flowery in places. Expand on what you need to until you've given us enough to play the build exactly how you intended, and then stop. There's no need for everything to have its own paragraph. For example, much of the battle tactics are fairly obvious and unnecessary. I appreciate that you're giving suggestions but it looks like clutter added on. A nice build nonetheless and a well deserved +1. The clear amount of effort you've put in warrants that much, if nothing else.
• flex buffchest

  

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  January 6, 2014

  Thanks for catching that, its supossed to be Witch Hunter.

  Thanks for catching that, its supossed to be Witch Hunter.

• Raid

  

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  January 6, 2014

  Still isn't right. Witchhunter should all be one word.

  Still isn't right. Witchhunter should all be one word.
• flex buffchest

  

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  January 6, 2014

  I was debating if i should take the cut back the battle tactics section and add in more, less obvious signature moves, also im working on posting a list of potions i use most.

  I was debating if i should take the cut back the battle tactics section and add in more, less obvious signature moves, also im working on posting a list of potions i use most.

• flex buffchest

  

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  January 6, 2014

  Thanks again, hopefuly its all correct now.

  Thanks again, hopefuly its all correct now.

• flex buffchest

  

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  January 7, 2014

  Thanks,i'm trying to get some better pics and a video by this weekend.

  Thanks,i'm trying to get some better pics and a video by this weekend.
• flex buffchest

  

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  January 9, 2014

  Well i believe everything is fixed, i fleshed some parts out and added some things, hope it looks better.

  Well i believe everything is fixed, i fleshed some parts out and added some things, hope it looks better.

• Mason

  
   

  January 11, 2014

  Ok, I'll finally bite...

  For a first build it's really good Penance, I like your opening paragraph regarding your reasons for posting...

  Let me read some...

  1. Build title feels odd! I enter titles like that into deathmatches alot! It's almost like you've spelled paladin wrong... Pick a new title for it would be my advise.

  2. Images are wrong. That first image feels too old school, it's like it's week 1 of Skyrm and your noob character just got the twin souls perk and you're standing proud in the armor you forgot to upgrade. Dig out some awesome art for your main image and definitely lose that grainy 2nd image...

  3. Page format feels too spaced out and list-like, it's the equivalent of someone reading you a single page of a book and then pausing for an hour between pages expecting you to enjoy the story. Snug it up neat and use bold for your headings.

  4. Battle Tactics section feels exhausting to read. Keep chopping at it like it's a rough diamond until only the really shiny bits are left. Use images to back up/break up your text...

  That's it for now! Keep polishing mate!

  Ok, I'll finally bite...

  For a first build it's really good Penance, I like your opening paragraph regarding your reasons for posting...

  Let me read some...

  1. Build title feels odd! I enter titles like that into deathmatches alot! It's almost like you've spelled paladin wrong... Pick a new title for it would be my advise.

  2. Images are wrong. That first image feels too old school, it's like it's week 1 of Skyrm and your noob character just got the twin souls perk and you're standing proud in the armor you forgot to upgrade. Dig out some awesome art for your main image and definitely lose that grainy 2nd image...

  3. Page format feels too spaced out and list-like, it's the equivalent of someone reading you a single page of a book and then pausing for an hour between pages expecting you to enjoy the story. Snug it up neat and use bold for your headings.

  4. Battle Tactics section feels exhausting to read. Keep chopping at it like it's a rough diamond until only the really shiny bits are left. Use images to back up/break up your text...

  That's it for now! Keep polishing mate!

• flex buffchest

  

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  January 11, 2014

  Thanks Mason, getting that type of feedback gives me more confidence for my second build, all of the pics besides the art pics are taken from my flat screen t.v, I agree they don't hold a candle to you more known builders screen shots, but with my second build I really stepped up my photography skills and I'm only adding one "home made pic", as for the armor combo I wanted to keep it bosmer like and relatively original, but I believe I put originality over practicality and now that you mention it, it kinda does look like a level two bandit. Thanks again, I learned a lot off of this build and watching other builds that were posted around the same time of what type of features work and what doesn't .

  Thanks Mason, getting that type of feedback gives me more confidence for my second build, all of the pics besides the art pics are taken from my flat screen t.v, I agree they don't hold a candle to you more known builders screen shots, but with my second build I really stepped up my photography skills and I'm only adding one "home made pic", as for the armor combo I wanted to keep it bosmer like and relatively original, but I believe I put originality over practicality and now that you mention it, it kinda does look like a level two bandit. Thanks again, I learned a lot off of this build and watching other builds that were posted around the same time of what type of features work and what doesn't .