[blockquote][b][url=/profile/D3LTAFOX]DeltaFox[/url] said:[/b]

Thanks, Zonn. It may seem like the sentences are unorganized, but since I'm writting from Tyron's perspective, he doesn't actually give a shit about grammar. He's just trying to kill some time.

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That's a nice added touch (but now I'm worried I'm illiterate as I thought it was organised fine...), it's little quirks like that that make everthing seem mor believable.

[blockquote][b][url=/profile/D3LTAFOX]DeltaFox[/url] said:[/b]

Thanks, Zonn. It may seem like the sentences are unorganized, but since I'm writting from Tyron's perspective, he doesn't actually give a shit about grammar. He's just trying to kill some time.

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That's a nice added touch (but now I'm worried I'm illiterate as I thought it was organised fine...), it's little quirks like that that make everthing seem mor believable.

The newest entry is good, Delta. You've shown us his interests while setting up a future RP point in his plans to return to the Dwemer tower, and you've also dropped a few words of wisdom that seem like they're a code of the order or part of his training - never leave your gear behind. Stuff like that is compelling, especially when presented organically in this style, occasionally interspersed in the narrative.