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Character Build: Karogran

• Spencer Verdusco

  

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  January 21, 2014

  The build author can do it themselves once the appropriate amount of likes is reached.

  The build author can do it themselves once the appropriate amount of likes is reached.
• Alastor

  

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  January 23, 2014

  To fix your picture formatting issues, make sure there is a line break before and after your image. Align the picture, then delete the line breaks. If any text is too near the image, they will be formatted with the same alignment as the image. Also, I agree with Albino on that Alchemy pic. The real image of a bottle of poison just clashes too much with the others.

  To fix your picture formatting issues, make sure there is a line break before and after your image. Align the picture, then delete the line breaks. If any text is too near the image, they will be formatted with the same alignment as the image. Also, I agree with Albino on that Alchemy pic. The real image of a bottle of poison just clashes too much with the others.
• LiTiBi

  

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  January 23, 2014

  Hi Penance!
  
  Hope you don't mind if I can give you some feedback:
  
  - You have a tendency to write run-on sentences and there are a number of grammar errors. It makes it hard to read through the build, so further proofreading is necessary.

  - Aside from the writeup in the Backstory section, I suggest adding another descriptive paragraph in the Build section explaining what the character build is in terms of gameplay. This will help readers know what to expect and how all your choices come together to make the build.

  - A couple of your potions do not have the ingredients list.

  - Is Karogran the name of the character or something? I don't think that by reading the character title, people will know what your build is about. Therefore, they won't be attracted to reading it. I suggest giving the character build a name that is descriptive of what it is, such as "Marksman of the Order" or something like that. You may also want to capitalize the "b" in the word "build." It makes it look consistent with the other build titles here.

  - Continue to work on the text and picture formatting, as the others have recommended.
  
  You have a great build on your hands, using alchemy to weaken your enemies and then letting your summons mop them up. It just needs a more polished presentation in order to sell it.
  
  Keep at it! 

  Hi Penance!
  
  Hope you don't mind if I can give you some feedback:
  
  - You have a tendency to write run-on sentences and there are a number of grammar errors. It makes it hard to read through the build, so further proofreading is necessary.

  - Aside from the writeup in the Backstory section, I suggest adding another descriptive paragraph in the Build section explaining what the character build is in terms of gameplay. This will help readers know what to expect and how all your choices come together to make the build.

  - A couple of your potions do not have the ingredients list.

  - Is Karogran the name of the character or something? I don't think that by reading the character title, people will know what your build is about. Therefore, they won't be attracted to reading it. I suggest giving the character build a name that is descriptive of what it is, such as "Marksman of the Order" or something like that. You may also want to capitalize the "b" in the word "build." It makes it look consistent with the other build titles here.

  - Continue to work on the text and picture formatting, as the others have recommended.
  
  You have a great build on your hands, using alchemy to weaken your enemies and then letting your summons mop them up. It just needs a more polished presentation in order to sell it.
  
  Keep at it!