The Heart of a Beast: Chapter 1-1 Hunting Misadventures

  • (I got sick of writing large chapters that continue the story, so I wanted to write little short stories, tell me what you all think?) I walk incredibly slow, to make sure I make as little noise as possible. As I walk, I make sure to not step on any leaves or branches to keep utterly silent. The air is cold and I can see my breathe. There is no snow, despite the frigid air, which is great. Even though it gives me a better chance at hiding, it also gave gives me a better chance at being heard. I walk past tree by tree. I stop. I see my prey: a deer I've been tracking for half an hour now... I take out my bow, and pull an arrow back across the bowstring. I make sure that my aim is perfect... I hold my breathe... "KORIN!!! WHERE ARE YOU?!" a nearby voice shouts, and out of terror, the deer runs away from the sound. I sigh. I stand back up and sheathe my bow "There you are." Says a woman, wearing leather armor wielding a crossbow. "I've been searching for you for hours now." "Dragon..." I say calmly. "I was in the middle of a hunt, I almost got a deer.If you hadn't have yelled, I would have been able to get a shot off and we could have made some money. So thanks. Thanks for that." Dragon is a friend of mine, a Breton woman; wielding both a crossbow and magic, she is one of the most dangerous people I have ever met. But behind that fearsome exterior, is an incredibly cheerful woman who is one of the only people that I can trust in this world. "Well I'm sorry for wanting to see my friend. I'm sorry for worrying about your safety with bandits about. I'm sorry for messing up your stupid hunt one time even though you can hunt again any day of the week. I'm so sorry!" She yells back at me, sounding equally angry and hurt. She is also the last person I would ever wanted to cross... I sigh and hang my head. "I didn't mean it like that, it's just... Hunting is what I do for enjoyment. It is what I guess you would call my hobby. It brings me peace. And I just wanted to have one peaceful morning. I'm sorry" She looks at me and starts to calm down. "Ok, I didn't mean to yell at you like that, but seriously, why do you love hunting so much?" She asks while edging closer to me. I lean up against a tree as I sit down. "Well, hunting was the only thing that I was allowed to do in my clan. They said I was to young to learn how to make armor or weapons, I wasn't that skilled in making potions, and I wasn't a skilled story teller. So I had to find something to do. When I'm out here, knowing that one wrong step could alert my prey, that one missed shot could give it a chance to run away... That exhilaration makes me feel alive." She looks at me and asks "Do you think you could teach me how to properly hunt?" I look at her feeling confused. "Why? Why do you want to know how to hunt?" She answers "Maybe if I try to hunt, I can understand more clearly how this makes you feel." It is harder to hunt when you have two hunters as it provides more noise and chances to be caught... "Please..." She looks at me with sad eyes... Damn those sad eyes. "Alright, but be as quiet as you possibly can, ok?" I say to her in defeat. She smiles as we walk to another location. Today is going to be a long day.

Comments

6 Comments
  • Tompa
    Tompa   ·  May 5, 2013
    Nice one. Simple, but very nice! I think I'll read the next :P
  • Ashi
    Ashi   ·  February 5, 2013
    What makes this strong is the point of view. And the internal monologue balanced with the actual dialogue.
  • Matt Feeney the New Guy
    Matt Feeney the New Guy   ·  January 14, 2013
    By the way, I did enjoy the chapter and look forward to the next one.
  • Matt Feeney the New Guy
    Matt Feeney the New Guy   ·  January 14, 2013
    I know what you mean with the long chapters, this should definitely be easier on yourself (hell I might try this).
  • Bryn
    Bryn   ·  January 14, 2013
    I'm going to finish this story either tonight or tomorrow. I have an idea but I'm not entirely sure what to do.
  • Skyler
    Skyler   ·  January 14, 2013
    I kinda liked it, wondering where you're gonna take it from here.