The last line tangentially brings to mind for me 'divine spark.' While more related to Lorkhan and Nirn, it does show odd ways Bethesda has used the term before.
You're so damned clever Paul. This is marvellous use of language and lore. I have no problem with "immortal spark I eat". It is honest and matches the whole, or brings it down to earth. If you got any cleverer with the last line it could bring the story i... moreYou're so damned clever Paul. This is marvellous use of language and lore. I have no problem with "immortal spark I eat". It is honest and matches the whole, or brings it down to earth. If you got any cleverer with the last line it could bring the story into doubt. Anyone reading who may be a little confused will instantly understand when they get to the end.
They were created in the image of Akatosh (whom they call Bormah- Father). I think one could definitely make the argument it is a gift from him. At the very least, it sounds better.
Thanks for the suggestions! "Soul" would be redundant, unless I changed "soul-swallowed" in line 5 to something else. I like "gift".... Is the dragons' immortality a gift? If so, from whom? I was under the impression that they just existed sort of ind... moreThanks for the suggestions! "Soul" would be redundant, unless I changed "soul-swallowed" in line 5 to something else. I like "gift".... Is the dragons' immortality a gift? If so, from whom? I was under the impression that they just existed sort of independently of everything else, but it's been a while since I looked at the lore.
Keep it up! These just get better and better. If your really want to replace spark, the only words I can think of would be "soul", "force", or possibly "gift" could work.
Vuljotnaak is one of the scripted encounters of the main quest. Follow the road west of Whiterun after meeting Delphine at Kynesgrove, and you'll see Alduin opening his tomb at the intersection of roads to Markarth and Rorikstead.
My skald encoun... moreVuljotnaak is one of the scripted encounters of the main quest. Follow the road west of Whiterun after meeting Delphine at Kynesgrove, and you'll see Alduin opening his tomb at the intersection of roads to Markarth and Rorikstead.
My skald encountered him at night (with ELFX and Realistic Nights - a beautiful but harrowing experience!), and was able to defeat him with a frost-enchanted Elven sword he had found in some old barrow.
It occurred to me that the dragon names mean stuff, and I could try to work them into these poems.
Vuljotnaak means Dark Maw Eat. I placed the dragon's name near the poem's center, and arranged the three words at the beginning, middle, and end of the poem.
This is maybe my favorite, but for the last line. Think I need another word instead of 'spark', the eating of which is impossible or comical to imagine... less
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